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:iconekuboryu:
My character, Lillit, saves :icondoughboycafe: 's character, Pietro, from a watery doom.

This is my entry for the :iconprojectcomment: Take a Crit and Vamp it contest, which can be found here: [link]

The challenge was to take an old piece of art and, using critique from the other entrants, rework it. We also had to critique the works of at least two other people.

I critiqued more than two because I figured we all could use all of the help we could get. but two of them are: [link] and [link]

my own piece was here: [link] and I got comments and critique that helped me along from:

:icondoughboycafe: :iconoboe-wan: :icondovespirit: :iconcinryc: :iconmanwathiell: and :iconjayemjee:

changes include:

a more full drawing of the anatomy before putting in the water so that I could be sure that things were at proper angles

more attention to the rope

a straighter horizon (doh!)

color/shading


/end artist comment of doom!
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^namenotrequired Nov 25, 2010  Student Interface Designer
Congrats on your placing in the contest! :) I've featured your piece here: [link] :D
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!NothingHere94 Nov 23, 2010
This is great! I haven't seen much colour in your gallery, but I think it really works for you. The shading is great, especially on the girl's dress. Her hair also looks really good here. The facial expressions are also much more emotive than in your other drawings, especially on the girl. Even the rope looks awesome, with the fraying and stuff. I've gotta say, I really do like your style, and I hope to see more colour from you in the future :D

Keep up the great work!
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~Ekuboryu Dec 15, 2010
A belated thank you for all of your nice plump constructive comments. I worked quite hard on this piece so I am glad it comes across well.

Thanks so much for your comments and your help with a contest that made me work so hard!
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~oboe-wan Nov 1, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
(It's not really that long of an artist's comment.)

I love love the shading on Lil's green bodice. How many shades is that anyway? It looks great.

Expressions with mouths open always intimidate me, but you are selling it very nicely.

I think it's actually good that your horizon isn't totally straight - I mean, it's the ocean, there are waves, and the color of the sky seems to indicate that the weather is a bit foul, so the choppy water works well.
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~Ekuboryu Nov 1, 2010
I am glad you approve of the undershirt. I was trying to make it look wet. I am also glad the mouth works. She is supposed to be yelling for them to pull her in.

I like the horizon as it is now but in the original I was told that it was slanted, and indeed it was! it looked like they were about to go over a waterfall. They have enough problems without a waterfall....

Thanks for the comment, love
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^3wyl Oct 23, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Really intense, this!

I like the detail and the way you've applied the medium here. It feels quite simple in its background and stuff, but I think the atmosphere is still quite profound, especially with the urgency of the situation being so heavily portrayed to us here.

Great composition. I like how this feels like an illustration from a storybook as well. :)
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~Ekuboryu Oct 23, 2010
Thanks so much!

I wanted to improve as much as possible without losing the life and urgency of the original . I am glad it still has that feel to it.
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=doughboycafe Oct 22, 2010  Professional Writer
Wow, the redrawing of this is incredible. It really is. I love the coloring, specifically the shading on Lillit's dress and the layers of color on Pietro's face to make him swarthier than Lil is (haha who is fake Spanish yes).

The details in this, the little pieces of hair, the rope fibers, are well done.

I think the most improvement is in the life and character of Lil's face - the angle is better, there is more motion and action in it, a better sense of urgency than before.

On a more laughabl note, Pietro is still bloody useless. Who invited him anyhow?
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~Ekuboryu Oct 23, 2010
Imogene.

PS. ...I think Dimitri might now think he is a bit of a snake. Sorry about that?
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=doughboycafe Oct 23, 2010  Professional Writer
Oh Dimitri, that is giving him too much credit.

He is not a snake, he's just stupid and 14.
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